Red
Review
Brett
and Jodie's Outer Senshi Webpage |
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First
Impressions |
Mmmm..
Outer Senshi [Homer drool] I hope this is a good page! |
Main
Page |
Fast
loader. That's a beautiful background of the Outer Senshi and
of Sailormoon. Also, a rarely seen picture at the top of the page.
Layout of this page seems fairly generic. No tables, all vertical
placement. A beginner's page, obviously. The loading time is excellent.
The page only took a few seconds to load up. Okay, scrolling down.
Not too much to scroll. Hm. text. Ugh.. punctuation? any? PLEASE??
God.. Punctuation makes things easier to read.. It would be a
good idea to add some periods in your sentences. [snort] Awesome
links, ne? I believe I detect an ego. [heroic stance, mouth moves
fast but words come out Godzilla style] I must save the web surfers
from the ego! Witches and children first! |
Brett's
opinion |
Brett's
senshi opinions based on favourites. Let's see here. Nice neptune
background, but using a table would help to keep the text off
of the side border. He thinks Neptune rocks a monkey's ass. Interesting
choice of words. [sweats] I hardly believe any character in BSSM
is perfect in anyway, but this is just opinion. Again, no punctuation.
Is this guy trying to break the record for world's longest sentence?
Or is his keyboard just missing a period or exclamation key? Since
when is Saturn funny? She isn't always trying to cheer people
up. She's too busy trying to destroy the universe as Mistress
Nine to cheer people up. Apparently Setsuna takes a liking to
a brat named Rinnie. [cracks up] That's a new one. "6. SAILOR
MARS SHES THE MOST RUTHLESS CHARACTER I JUST LOVE HER RUDE ATTITUDE
WHICH ROCKS MY WORLD SHE HAS THE MOST GUTS OUT OF THE OTHERS AND
THOSE OF YOU WHO THINK SHES RUDE AND HARSH AND ALWAYS CUTTING
DOWN USAGI REALLY NEED TO STOP WATCHING DIC SAILOR MOON." Since
you used "Rinnie", I make the assumption you also watch DIC Sailormoon.
Did I also mention that I hate caps? It's hard to read everything
when it's all in caps, plus it makes one seem arrogant and loud.
Hm Hm Hm. Definitely a dubbie because the author says scouts instead
of soldiers. Jupiter is not always the strongest in battle as
well. Sailormoon is and then the Outer Senshi. Blah. This guy
seems to hate the Starlights. Ugh, I can't read this anymore.
It's opinionated, but the info given is partially incorrect. It's
all vague and known information piled together in poor spelling,
grammar and mechanics. |
Story |
A
DiC type story covering the first season of Sailormoon. All in
caps and without sentence structure. The picture at the top is
broken because it links to his hard drive. He might be able to
see it but nobody else would be able to see it. |
Villains |
Broken
picture linked to a hard drive picture again. Do I really need
to go through this? He lists his favourite villains based on his
opinions and offers more false information through a jumble of
capital letters. Just a few nit-picks. Phora Ninty should be Pharoah
Ninety, He completely misses the Fifth Witch (Who was the most
powerful Witch). Mis spelled names in the Anima mate section:
Tin Nyoco? Gomen ne, but no. Same with "Galixia". [shakes head
sadly] To clear you up a bit, FishEye is male. The only real punctuation
is used to talk about the Ayakashi Sisters: "I. LOVE. THEM." [no
comment] |
Questions
and Comments |
E-mail
Link |
Profile
Page |
HUUUUUUGE
pic! Holy smackers! Luckily I have a 56K modem, but those poor
souls who do not will be lagging and putt putt putting on as
this baby loads. The rest of the page is fast loading though.
Here we have profiles of the Outers. I suspected it would be
about the author, but it isn't. =-]
Sailor
Uranus: broken
Sailor
Neptune: broken
Sailor
Pluto: broken
hmm.. okay,
maybe Saturn is up. [clicks link] Ah! It's up. Sailor Saturn
An Usagi background at the top of the page. Makes no sense to
me. I guess it was just an error, but there seems to have been
a lot of those here so far.. Boring stats.. Here's help: Favourite
Sport: NONE. Hotaru does not play sports. HOPES TO GO TO: florence..
(Since when?) Broken pic linked to the hard drive again. This
is a huge blurb of words again, all in caps and none punctuated
with nothing more than commas. "Kaori the nasty housekeeper"??
Oh geez. She was one of Tomoe's minions, not the housekeeper.
Maybe posing as one, but she didn't ever seem to clean house.
Just flirt with the professor and wear small articles of clothing
while not sending daimons after the Sailorsenshi. "HOTARU IS
BROUGHT BACK TO LIFE AND WILL SOON BE PLAYING AGAIN IN THE 6TH
SEASON OF SAILORMOON WHICH THE WRITERS AND CAST ARE DISCUSSING"
WRONG WRONG WRONG! UGH! CAPS! UGH! SIXTH SEASON! UGH! UGH! UGH!
[loses it] THERE WILL BE NO SIXTH SEASON! [goes into convulsions]
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Picture
of the Month |
A
Very lovely picture of Sailorpluto and Chibi Usa from a Media
Book cover. All backgrounds are made by "Anna" (Or so we assume)
and he gives thanks to people whose names are aliases of, of course,
characters from both the DiC and Japanese Sailormoon. |
Final
Thoughts |
This
page has potential, but does not live up to it. Write in normal
text so your text can be read, and use punctuation and sentence
structure. Also, upload your images and link to the uploaded images.
Finally, run a spell checker through your work and make sure you
post correct information. If you compile correct information with
your already pleasing attributes like backgrounds, then your page
will be a lot nicer to browse through. |
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